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I've always
longed to
undress
your
thoughts,
see the
vulnerable
gears
that make you
tick
and with feathery touch
memorize
every raise and dip
in the texture
of their
surface.

You make my skin
crawl,
my thoughts go
AWOL,
like a great big wave
you crash
over
me,
leaving me feeling
helpless and weak,
far too raw and far too exposed
to bother
to salvage
the rags
of my
pride.

You play
tug of war
like a
champ
just to let the rope
fall
with me
still
hanging on,
oh

how

badly

I bleed truth
the heavier your breath
feels on my face,
the closer you come
to steal a kiss that
won't
ever
pass between
our
lips.

You like to leave me
out in the
cold,
watch my body
tremble,
my lips turn
blue,
I get a sick feeling that
sometimes
maybe
it warms you up
to see me getting the
shakes over
you.
.
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:iconeremitik:
Eremitik Featured By Owner May 13, 2014
Reading this over a few times, I can see how it might be interpreted in a couple different ways- either from the outside looking in or from the inside looking deeper- as well, I think it could also be written about yourself or about someone else, as you wonder what goes on in their mind-

That may sound a little more confusing than I meant it to be, lol.

Either way, I found this to be intelligent and well written, carrying a wonderful sense of imagery throughout the poem. Its also ambiguous enough so you can reach your own conclusions about its meaning.
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:iconlil-christa:
Lil-Christa Featured By Owner May 17, 2014
thank you! :hug:
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:iconeremitik:
Eremitik Featured By Owner May 21, 2014
Quite welcome
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
this is awesome! :D
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:iconlil-christa:
Lil-Christa Featured By Owner May 20, 2013
Thank you!! :hug:
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:iconimaginative-lioness:
imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is a wonderful piece, I love the opening to bits:

I've always
longed to
undress
your
thoughts,
see the
vulnerable
gears
that make you
tick
and with feathery touch
memorize
every raise and dip
in the texture
of their
surface.


Just so much imagery, so much beautiful imagery :heart:
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:iconlil-christa:
Lil-Christa Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013
oh my! thank you so much! :hug:
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:iconwykydwyka:
WykydWyka Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
very impressive
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:iconlil-christa:
Lil-Christa Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2013
Thanks!!
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:icondaniisantos:
DaniiSantos Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Very Beautiful, beautiful words by a sensitive soul! ;)
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